• What big concerns did you have about your draft as you completed the first draft?   I was worried about my paper that I wasn’t focused enough on the topic and that I was everywhere with my paper. I also thought my paper may not have been organized in the best way for the readers.

 

  • What did your peers like most about your paper? Be specific, perhaps by quoting from one (or more) of the comments on your paper. Be sure to credit your peer! Justin Dixson commented on my paper “Great waterboy analogy. I thought this was very original and smart, makes a lot of sense.”

 

  • Where are you working best with Gee? What do your peers think you can do to improve on that section? You might quote from a peer, and give credit. I think I worked best with Gee when I discuss his first theorem. My peers suggested that I introduce Gee before discussing his views.
  • Where are you working best with Cuddy? What do your peers think you can do to improve on that section? You might quote from a peer, and give credit. I think I work best with Cuddy when I discuss her view on power poses. Kiara said that Cuddy never says Discourse, she says identity kit. So I think in my writing I should discuss the similarities between the identity kit and Discourse and how it connects Cuddy and Gee.

 

 

  • According to your peers, what are your two biggest challenges in your work with the texts? How do you think you can address those challenges in your revision? If you need quotes or “evidence,” be specific about the text you should bring into a revision. If you need stronger explanations of your Gee-Cuddy relationships, be specific about what you need to explain. (Don’t re-write the paragraphs or sections. Rather, explain what you need to do.)

According to my peers, I need to focus on introducing my quotes, giving scenarios for situations, and go more into depth with introducing Gee and Cuddy and explaining Mushfake. To introduce Gee and Cuddy I could give information on where they are coming from, like why they think what they do, and what they specialize in. Also to explain Mushfake more clearly I could introduce it more and inform the readers on where that work comes from, and why it is used. To introduce quote more effectively I could more insight on why that quote is important and why Gee or Cuddy say it.

Using the guidance from your peers, put your overall perspective (viewpoint) into a sentence or two. How will you help your reader “get” your perspective? How I will help my readers understand my perspective is I will discuss my views more. In my first draft, I summarize Gee and Cuddy more than discussing my take on the discussion on “identity kit”, fake it till you become it, mushfake, and Discourse.