Introduction:
I did change the opening sentence of my paper to try and create more of a hook for the reader. Overall for my introduction, I did not change a lot because I felt that my introduction was solid. I did make small changes though that my peers had made comments on in my first draft.
Evidence and Explanations:
In my final draft, I did add some different quotes that I thought related more to the text and what I was trying to get across to the reader. For instance, in my fifth paragraph, I added some text from the IMRAD cheat sheet that showed significance to the overall topic of the paragraph. I feel that with the quote that I added the reader can better understand the information.
Reorganization:
I did not move any of my paragraphs I felt that the organization of my paper was good in my first draft. I did move around some ideas that had to do with curtian building tasks. I thought that in two of my paragraphs at the beginning the connections were similar so I changed the connection a little to relate to a different part that it was also connected to.
New Paragraphs:
I did not add any new paragraphs because I had felt that I added everything that I was clear on when connecting the different sources. I did, however, add length to my conclusion. It is because I went over all the information that I discussed and summarized the importance of it all and I did not do that in the first draft. In my first draft, I did not have a strong conclusion but I feel in the final draft my conclusion is well done.